I’m posting this for Jingles Thursday Poets Rally. I rarely share stuff that comes from a place of anger but i decide it’s time. No emotions last forever, “This too shall pass”, and in this case, it has 🙂 Also, i think this is one of my favorite poems of mine so far! it feels so intense to me when i read it back, almost like i don’t even know who wrote it… weird… yay for expression!
Goodbye
8.31.2010
last week your were my inspiration
this week, freedom from thoughts of you
is my final destination
i’ve wanted to be free from you for a while now
but i’m always met with some hesitation
fate and truth told me you were mine
i can’t believe they lied to me
i can’t believe i made it all up in my mind
i can’t believe i was so fucking blind
it wasn’t meant to be
i can finally clearly see
there will never be a you and me
we will never be a we
you want things i no longer want
like kids and dicks
and a white picket fence made of sticks
you want to be stuck with mens pricks
when we were together we both liked chicks
you hold on to your own sadness
you wear that crown of thorns with pride
but i know what you are doing
you are just trying to hide
from yourself
your pain
the wicked thoughts in your mind
it’s much easier to blame me
than it is to look deep inside
your perception is flawed, my dear
a million monks could yell it from the rooftop
but you wouldn’t hear
because all you do is live in fear
you put down your guitar
you stopped playing your song
but it’s your purpose god damit
you’re not happy
you’re just wrong
you’re heading away from the light of day
you’re headed into the dark
shit man, darkness really calls to you huh?
it sings to you like a lark
lies have become your disguise
and i don’t want to a part of it
i hope this poem is the very last
of all my goodbyes
u r not happy, u r just wrong…
fun lines…
very playful and powerful piece.
I feel the emotions.
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Wonderful play with worlds, well crafted and brilliantly written. Thank you for sharing kx
My entry for the week
http://kashaw.wordpress.com/2010/08/27/casino-jinks/
Kindest regards
K x
sometimes, you just need to let loose some emotions.. good work!!
mine for the Rally is Here
This poem must have been such a release for you. Great job!
Happy Thursday!
loved this, the rhyming of the words was purposeful and I can almost feel how betrayed you feel by this person…
…you want things i no longer want
like kids and dicks
and a white picket fence made of sticks
you want to be stuck with mens pricks
when we were together we both liked chicks…
Whoa…write it out…now that’s REAL poetic talk!
epic kiss off poem… good for you
Lovely work and the Goodbye is should be the last..
Happy Rally…
Sweet Dish
–Someone Is Special–
Very powerful. I can feel the emotions you were letting out.
This is stunning. Healing, you know? I adore this.
very powerful indeed. enjoyed the read!
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hii
u r a good poet
nice wrk!
wow. i have read a lot of your writing. this piece is very powerful. it is amazing how the broken heart can explode into words, just as the heart full of love can. i hope your pain will pass. take care.
i don’t know, reading this make me feel like there’s nothing to cry out of a breaking heart,,
spirit to move on,,
great work!
but these things dont run away as fast as you want to, right?
goodluck and goodjob =]
You’re a really strong writer. I really like reading what you have to say. (Not creepin’ or anything, haha.) This one piece, imparticular, is really powerful 🙂
thank you! creep away! i love knowing people like reading my stuff 🙂
Agreed…very powerful. Especially the line “lies have become your disguise”.
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